Need Opinions on Two Different Versions

Replies to This Discussion

Permalink Reply by Rosemary j. Lambin on November 30, 2010 at 10:50am

I like version #1.

• ▶ Reply

Permalink Reply by Ian wilson on November 30, 2010 at 5:58pm

Yeah version 1 - nice tune Gil, well done - I like it

• ▶ Reply

Permalink Reply by Stringhawk on November 30, 2010 at 8:20pm

Well, guess my ears are different. I like #2. Guitar sounds more natural. Both sound good, but you asked! :-)

• ▶ Reply

Permalink Reply by Patrick Michael Alaggio on December 2, 2010 at 6:04am

I tried Gil, but for some reason they wouldn't load.

• ▶ Reply

Permalink Reply by Frank Bonilla on December 2, 2010 at 11:09pm

I vote for version #1

• ▶ Reply

Permalink Reply by JB Maddox on December 3, 2010 at 7:54am

The vocal needs some compression to cut through the guitar--it is drowned out for the most part in both mixes but worse in the first one.
The guitar is too harsh and perhaps some chorus could fix that, the mood of the lyrics is supposed to be sweet and the guitar is harsh--that has to change. Get a bit more in the mid-range, some sweet chorus effect. Some strings tagging along could not hurt.
The progression is too monotonous over the entire song--rather than come up with some nice bridges or standout choruses--you can modulate up by a half-step for each new verse--keeps the attention.
As a songwriter, you might want to check out fantastic books on song construction by Rikkey Rooksby.
You also do not have a "hook"--some musical or lyrical device to catch the ear--to say to the listener--especially a producer or agent--hey, this is different!!

• ▶ Reply

• ‹ Previous
• 1
• 2
• Next ›
• Page